Recreating a section of Animal Farm in first person from an animal’s perspective
‘I’m going to make your children my personal responsibility,’ Napoleon spoke to me gently, however, what he was speaking about was not a gentle matter. I knew there was no argument I could use, and after all, they would be educated properly. ‘They will be kept in the loft,’ Napoleon went into detail, I must’ve had a confused face at the time. It was strange; for a minute I felt as if Napoleon was becoming one of them. I reminded myself ‘Four legs good, two legs bad, Napoleon does have four legs
October 6, 2013 at 11:46 pm
Your last sentence is your most powerful here. This is the best work I have seen of yours. You use emotive language well and create sympathy effectively for the mother. Your technical accuracy is also very good, except for the last sentence. In this instance, the meaning is so strong, you get away with it.